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Two Stories, but only One can Win

The past few days have been a comeback of summer temperatures, blended with the autum crisp air in the mornings and at night. It truly is a wonderful time of year, and things are finally beginning to wind down.

In an earlier post I mentioned in passing about an online magazine that I wanted to try writing a story for. Well, the website is called Havok, and you can get all the information about them here. The short of it is, they publish flash fiction in a variety of genres, each day of the week focusing on a separate genre, and each month has a different theme. I think this is a neat idea as both a reader and a writer – particularly as a writer, though, because it sets up a basic prompt for us to work with.

I decided I wanted to try submitting something for January, because the theme is dynamic duos, and I love that trope to pieces. Also because the submission deadline isn’t until November, which gives me plenty of time to work on something.

Well, I now have two stories. I wasn’t sure the first one was quite bold enough, so I tried a different approach, and as per usual I’m still not sure it’s epic enough. But then, with a max of 1,000 words, just how intense can you get? I tried, but I’m not sure if I’m stuffing too much into such a short span. We know how I am with short stories, The Forgotten Hero, anyone?

Anywho, I chose to explore a story idea I’ve had for a little while, which surrounds two young men and their misadventures. If you’d be willing to be a hero and help me out, I’d like to share the opening of each of the two stories and have you tell me which one is more intriguing to you, that will help me decide which one to submit.

Story 1: The Ruins of Ruyn

Sebastian Inons Bony was born with magic. It wasn’t your average magic, either, but a strong power with an affinity for light. He was tall, dark, and handsome, too, and the townsfolk claimed he really only had one fault: Kurt Elard, who was short, fair, and plain without so much as an iota of magical ability. But Kurt didn’t seem to mind, and neither did Sebastian. They had been friends since the day they ran into each other hunting for treasure in the woods.

They spent their childhood inseparable, but Sebastian’s magic and Kurt’s lack of it always lurked around the corner. They always knew that one day the College of Advanced Mage Arts would come and drive that nail of reality between them.

Story 2: Currently Untitled (because good titles are hard)

The earth trembled beneath the pressure of the Abyssal Rift. Writhing arms of darkness spewed from the gaping hole in the ground, blackening the sky and blending with the smoke billowing up from the burning town. Voidborne prowled the desecrated streets, ripping down buildings and choking the air with dread and fear and a visceral hatred.

Sebastian stepped through the translocation portal and paused to take in the scene. He had a hard time spotting the squadron scattered so thinly throughout the chaos. They were barely managing an evacuation.

So what do you think? With the first one I tried easing more slowly into the plot and introducing the chart, but with the second one I dove right into the action. Let me know in the comments which one you’d rather read – I’m excited to see which one wins out!

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  1. I like the second one more; than again, I’ve always been drawn to action.

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